开头段该屏蔽的词和句
众所周知,雅思的大作文必须有introduction。一般而言,introduction句子要求简洁、扣题。要写好开头段,下面的词或句型一定要避免!
1. as a result; therefore; hence; as a consequence
有些学生在写完背景句后,总想着要在后面加一个衔接词“as a result”,实际上没有必要,而且是非常不可取的,例如:
In many countries, traditional foods are replaced by international fast foods. As a result, some people claim that this trend has negative effect on both families and societies.
点评:As a result在这里,从英语的逻辑和句面意思来说,都是不正确的。As a result的前一句话必须讲原因,而不是在纯粹地描述一个社会现象。这一类别的连接词主要用在Body段的结束句.
2. 如果题目的题型是do you agree or disagree 或者 to what extent do you agree or disagree, 那么在改写观点的时候,下面的句型就不要出现啦:
Whether or not it is a negative effect on both families and societies, views vary from person to person.
People have different opinions about whether or not it has negative effect on both families and societies.
点评:为什么这些句型不能出现?因为题目中只给了一个观点,有且只有一个观点,烤鸭们千万不要硬生生地说有different opinions -_-“ 。
3. 如果题目的题型是discuss both views and give your own opinion, 请牢牢记住,在写自己观点的时候,不要用however,unfortunately开头,例如:
People hold various opinions about whether watching TV is good for children’s development or not. However, I think it depends on children’s own personalities.
点评:你只是在阐述不同的人有不同的观点,以及你自己的观点,完全没有出现转折的关系,干嘛要用however呢??直接说I think…..就可以了。虽然连接词是很重要,但一定要用准确,否则只会拉分,不可能提分!
4. Reasons和solutions之间没有转折关系,万万不可用however衔接。
在写report类别时候,包括reasons & solutions,有些学生会错误的使用连接词however。那到底如何错了呢?
很多学生在写body段的时候,总是纠结于怎么用衔接词,于是乎,有些文章就出现“为了写衔接词而写衔接词”的尴尬情况。比如,在写 reasons & solutions的报告类文章时,学生写完了2段的reasons后,为了使文章过渡得比较流畅,在solutions段落的开头,居然用了however。例如:
However, the problem of traffic jam can be addressed effectively with more comfortable public transport being provided.
点评:虽然意图是美好的,但结果却是悲催的~~ 因为body 前2段讲的是reasons,后两段讲的是solutions,两者没有任何转折关系,所以不能用however.
总而言之,要写出满意的开头段,那就乖乖地屏蔽上面这些错误吧!!
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