2016.12.03
Academic Sample Essay
International travel has many advantages to travellers and to the country visited. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
With globalisation allowing more and more people to travel overseas, it is arguable that there are both positive and negative aspects for both tourists and the countries that they visit. In my opinion, there are more advantages than disadvantages.
One main drawback of increasing international travel is the damage of natural landscapes at holiday destinations, which has also resulted in higher expenses imposed on tourists to visit these areas. The effect of more tourism at popular destinations has created a harmful cycle that affect both travellers and the countries they explore. For instance, Sipadan Island in East Malaysia was once touted as one of the top reefs by avid overseas scuba divers, but the damage on the reef from litter was so extensive that the tourism board tripled the price of accommodation for overseas visitors to control the issue. These outcomes are hence the disadvantages of International travel.
On the other hand, a significant advantage of international travel is that it benefits the economy in the countries that tourists visit. A thriving tourism industry increases the demand for services like hotels, transport and entertainment which creates thousands of jobs and generates billions of dollars from tourism alone in many countries. Tourism in Bali, for instance, is one of the largest industry in terms of income and as a result, it has been estimated that 80% of its economy was tourism-related. Overseas travel is thus advantageous for destination countries due to economic gain.
Additionally, explorations of different countries can also allow overseas travellers to gain more insight into other cultures. Through sight-seeing of historic sights and eating local food, travellers themselves are able to expand their horizons. For example, a visitor to Tokyo is able to learn more of its ancient history by visiting the many shrines peppered around the city, as well as indulge in local food delicacies to understand Japanese culture in more depth. International travel thus also benefits tourists individually.
In conclusion, I believe from the points above that whilst travelling internationally can harm natural landscapes and make destinations more expensive for tourists, tourism allows economies to thrive at destination countries and benefits travellers’ cultural knowledge. Hence the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
[Key vocabulary]
globalization n. 全球化
natural landscapes 自然景观
holiday destinations 度假胜地
tourism n. 旅游业
a harmful cycle 恶性循环
tout v. 兜售,吹嘘,
此处,可以理解为西巴丹岛曾被号称是最好的珊瑚礁
avid adj. 热切的
scuba diver 水肺潜水者
thriving adj. 繁荣的
benefits the economy 对经济有利
generate v. 形成,产生
tourism-related adj. 与旅游业相关的
advantageous adj. 有利的
economic gain 经济成果
exploration n. 探索
gain insights into other cultures 深入了解其他文化
expand horizons 拓宽视野
shrine n. 神社
indulge in 沉溺于
delicacy n. 美味佳肴
本文的行文逻辑十分清晰,论述的过程层层推进,所举的例子也非常切题,并且生动。大家在日常练习雅思大作文的时候,不妨试着参照此文开展论述,尤其是写着写着就容易“off the topic”的同学,看看能不能改善自己的问题。
本文的另一大亮点就是topic-related words。大家可以发现,作者所用的词汇并没有什么特别难、或复杂的‘大词’,但依然能给人带来此文词汇非常丰富的感觉,并且几乎没有一个相同的单词反复出现。这虽然和作者较好的词汇功底有直接关系,但对于我们而言也不是不可模仿的。要知道,日常的积累才是作文行云流水的最佳保障哦~
*号外号外*
想要在圣诞期间搞定雅思写作口语?圣诞课程来啦!
7分写作口语圣诞晚班12月12日开课啦!
课表如下:
就在下周一,利用圣诞以及新年的假期,努力三周,搞定雅思!
同时
7分写作口语晚班12月19日开课哦~
墨尔本的烤鸭们可以直接联系无忧小雅哥(mr_51ielts)咨询报名哦~
悉尼校区2016年末课程信息
7分口语白班——12月10日开课
还有少量余位,预定抓紧了哦!
7分写作白班以及7分写作口语晚班
16年的课程已经全部开课满员啦!
下一期课程2017年1月初开课哦!
6分晚班:写作/听力还有少量余位
6分白班:口语/听力还剩少量余位
悉尼的烤鸭们抓紧联系悉尼雅思姐(mrs_51ielts)占位吧!