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2014/11/08 Task2 写作范文

Some people believe crime is a result of circumstance such as poverty or other social problems. Others think it is caused by people having bad nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


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Anytime a crime is committed, many are left to ask why it happened or what the motive was. Some have argued that crime results from unfortunate circumstances, whilst others believe it arises from an immoral nature. I personally believe that crimes happen for both reasons, and I will explain why in this essay.

非常清晰明了的复述了题目交代的背景和问题,写明了作者自身的观点,引出下文。字数不多,却”五脏俱全”


On the one hand, crime can be a last resort for the needy or desperate. Sometimes people find themselves in a bad way, without the money to pay for rent or to feed themselves and their family. Given an inability to earn a living honestly, many turn to crime to survive. For example, poverty stricken neighbourhoods typically have higher instances of theft and robbery.

Furthermore, social influence can create a tendency towards criminal activity. Research has shown that there are more single parents nowadays as result from higher divorce rates. In these instances, kids may find themselves being mentored by poor influences in the absence of positive role models. Research has also shown that juvenile delinquency is higher amongst single parent households.

这两段作者的观点是环境会对罪犯产生影响,从而导致犯罪。首先,贫穷绝望的人们为了生计,更容易犯下抢劫或者偷盗之类的罪行。其次,社会的影响会增加犯罪率。比如单亲家庭的孩子,由于缺少positive的榜样,可能会比其他孩子更容易犯罪。


On the other hand, some people are inherently bad. The concepts of good and bad, righteous and evil, or right and wrong exist for a reason. When people lack moral character, they may commit crimes for no other reason than they are bad people. For instance, greed led to several high profile white-collar crimes where large sums of money were embezzled by already wealthy businessmen. Otherwise, there are also many instances of killers who were raised under favourable circumstances.

这段作者的主要观点是证明有些罪犯的本质就是坏的。完成题目要求—Discuss both views.


In conclusion, there is no means of predicting if a person will commit a crime, as there are a number of reasons why people do it. While criminals can be a result of unfortunate circumstances, like poverty or broken homes, some people in this world are just plain rotten.

再次写明自己观点—circumstances和bad natural都是引起犯罪的原因之一。

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