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Task1

内部学员范文

The line graph compares the number of visitors to three different museums in London, namely British Museum, Science Museum and Natural History Museum during a period of four monthes[1] in 2013.

[1] months

In June 2013, 600 thousand people visited to British Museum, while only 400 thousand went to Science Museum. The figure for Natural History Museum visitors stood at around 550 thousand in June[1].

[1] delete

In can be seen that the number of visitors to British Museum reached its peak in July (750 thousand), followed by a dramatic drop to 500 thousand in August. Compared with that, the figure for Natural History Museum visitors remained stable at almost 380 thousand[1], while the figure for Science Museum experienced a steadily[2] decrease to 300 thousand between July and August.

[1] with some 380 thousand during the same time

[2] steady

Those three museums had all upward trends[1] after August to 650 thousand, 480 thousand and 470 thousand respectively for British, Science and Natural History Museum.

[1] Number of visitors to each museum experienced an upward trend by September

It is clear that[1] although there was a big fluctuation for number of people visiting British Museum, its[2] figure remained the highest among the three during this four-month period. Both of the other two museums experienced initial drops followed by noticeable rises in the last two months shown.

[1] Overall

[2] the

51ielts Tutor Comments

TA: 8 ~ 9 – response covers all requirements of the task sufficiently and presents, highlights and illustrates key features / bullet points clearly and appropriately.

CC: 8 - sequences information and ideas logically. This answer shows me a very good management all aspects of cohesion. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately

LR: 8 - a wide range of vocabulary is used fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings.

GRA 8 ~ 9 - a wide range of structures is shown in your answer. The majority of sentences are error-free, though you made only very occasional errors and inappropriacies

雅思小作文T1

满分标准解读

Task Achievement

1.Fully satisfies all the requirements of the task

标准解读：

烤鸭们在写作时首先要仔细阅读题干，读懂题目要求。小作文标题一般分两句话，第一句话介绍图表内容，第二句话提出要求。一般要求都是：Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 也就是说，写作时要做到两点：选择并总结出表格的主要特征，同时进行适当的比较分析。考生如果只是列出一些图表信息，而不进行适当比较的话，则无法获得高分。

2. clearly presents a fully developed response

标准解读：

　(1)完整、有逻辑地谋篇布局。

　(2)写作目的清晰。

　(3)主要内容完整、切题、正确、有理有据: 考生要能自然地展开论述，善始善终地表达观点、陈述事实。所举论据能很好的支持论点。

Coherence & Cohesion

1. uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention

标准解读：

好文章的最高境界就是：“连贯得让人没有感觉”。也就是说不刻意用连接词，不滥用模板句和过渡句, 而做到句与句之间逻辑清晰，语意连贯，连接词和短语的运用信手拈来，整个文章浑然一体。

文章的连贯要注意以下几个问题：

　　(1)段落衔接自然。

　　(2)论证时注意思路清晰，过渡自然。好文章是由思想编织的。

　　(3)适当运用连接词。对于雅思小作文写作来说，使用连接词的目的是为了更强大的逻辑引导和语气强调。

2. skillfully manages paragraphing

标准解读：

熟练运用分段技巧,在进行段落划分时要注意以下几个问题：

　　(1)根据文章脉络划分自然段

　　(2)段落衔接自然

　　(3)每段主旨和要点明确

Lexical resource

Uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features; rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’.

标准解读：

用词要多样、精确、自然、有风格。个别小错误在所难免。

1.多样：体现出多变的用词。不仅仅要会用最基础的词汇，同时要能体现出运用高端书面词汇的能力。另外，考生还应注意变换地运用同义词，而不是重复同一个词。这一点对于雅思小作文写作尤为重要，例如考生在描述一条曲线的趋势时，经常会反复表达上升、下降、最高点、最低点等意义，这就需要考生在日常的学习过程中，多注重相关词汇的积累。

2.精确：所用词在句中语意连贯正确，词性准确，感情色彩贴切，用法地道，拼写无误。

3.自然：灵活用词，不刻意堆砌辞藻，用词恰到好处，为文章的表意而服务。

4.有风格：对于雅思小作文而言，考生在写作时应保持客观严谨的写作风格。

5.小错误：满分文章也并非一点错误都没有。写作时不要为了刻意追求完美而影响了表意和流利度。

Grammatical range accuracy

Uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

标准解读：

1.Wide range of structures：要体现出能运用各种句式结构的能力，包括简单句、各类从句、分词短语、并列句等等。

2.Flexibility：灵活运用各类句型。文章长短句交错，每句话的形式结构恰到好处，为合理传递信息表达思想而服务。

3.Accuracy：尽量避免语法错误，包括时态、语态、句式、标点的错误等。

4.Rare minor errors：满分作文也并非要完全避免语法错误。考生在写作时应在清晰表达思路的前提下，尽量注意语法问题。

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幸亏考前看了题库准备，碰到老题不能更开心！！！P1 name, house/apartment, holiday都是经常出现的老题，我基本是按照自己准备的思路回答的，问题不大~P2 a time you were away from home这个也很好说~我说的是和朋友出去长途旅行~最后一部分的题目说了挺多的，因为我的旅行经历比较有意思。问题太多，记不住了。。。对不住大家了。。。

Just finished my last IELTS test this year!!! Part 1 she asked me some questions about my personal details, such as name, study major. and clothes, shoes. Part 2 describe a long jounry. Part 3 not different to think about ideas. How often do you go for a long jounry? what kind of journey is a long journey? Do you like travel for a long time or in a short period?Good luck guys!

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