【秘籍】如何写好G类书信?附内部7.5分范文

2015年11月27日 无忧小雅哥




G类写作的第一部分通常是写一封信,类别非常广泛,各种内容都有可能涉及到;收信人也很多变,从熟悉的到陌生的,都有可能会考到。所以,


G类的考生在写信的时候要注意:


第一, 要注意书信的卷面格式;

卷面必须是标准的信件格式,不要写成中式的信件格式。如果说最基本的格式有问题,那Task 1部分的分数就会很 “难看”哦!~


第二, 要清楚写作的任务要求;

何为任务要求?就是题目中要求你写的内容,包括小标题。千万不要写着写着就写High了,写偏题了。针对题目中的三个小问题,一个一个解决,紧紧扣题,尽量将偏题的可能性降到最低!~


第三, 要注意书信开头和结尾的 “固定” 句型;

信件开始的部分,要有一些 “客套话”。 说白了,其实就是寒暄几句。对于熟悉的人,可以问问: “你最近怎么样啦” 之类的客套话。

结尾部分,也要适当的客套几句。比如:Thanks for your time and reply 等等等等。具体写法需要根据不同信件的内容而改变。建议烤鸭们可以准备几句不同Tone和不同内容的开头句结尾句,考场上可以灵活运用。



第四, 要采用合适的语言文体;

这就是我们常说的Tone了。一般G类的书信分为Formal, Informal 还有夹在中间的 Semi-formal. 比如,写给团体或组织结构的信需要用Formal Tone,用词和句法结构都不能太随意; 而写给亲朋好友的信语言则需要写成Informal Letter,用词和句法结构就可以随意一些。



在考试之前,G类的烤鸭们要做的事情就是根据不同种类的书信分一下类。常考的信件类型有投诉信,请求信,感谢信,咨询信等等。背诵相关Tone的用词和开头落款写法,研究有关范文的行文布局选词造句,然后实战练习几篇,相信在考场上搞定G类书信并非太难!~


讲完了理论,现在我们来实战一下!~

下面这道题,是比较经典的G类书信考题之一。

大家可以花20分钟的时间来练练手!~


You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Tak: write a letter to your new boss

  • Explaining your situation

  • Expressing your concern and suggesting a solution

Begin your letter as follow:

Dear Sir or Madam,


那么,7分的范文是怎么样的?

下面这篇文章,是无忧写作批改系统学员的一篇文章。通过批改,大家完全可以来学习一下到底什么地方是好的,什么地方需要改进!~


Dear Sir or Madam,


I am delighted to receive notice that my application for a position with your company has been successful. (批注:It would be very appropriate to open the letter by stating how happy you are to have been offered the job. This is not just polite but also assures your new boss that you are enthusiastic even though you can’t start when you are supposed to.) I understand that my start date is November 15. I am writing to let you know that due to circumstances that have arisen, I will not be able to start until November 16.


I am writing to you to let you know that I am not able to attend the new staff training session. (批注:The question doesn’t mention any ‘new staff training session’ so it is confusing to open your letter in this way. You have made an assumption that your first day at work will be a training session. You can make such an assumption but it is best to open your letter using the information provided in the question.)


I just passed a job interview with your company for a position as an account assistant, and the job was supposed to start on November 15. (批注:I’ve deleted this because it is covered in my rewrite of the opening paragraph) However, y Yesterday, I was notified by the Migration Department that I needed to do a physical examination on November 15 to complete my working visa application. On November 15. I am therefore afraid that I will not be able to attend the new staff training session on that day. I understand that a training session for new staff is to be held on November 15 which I will therefore unfortunately not be able to attend.


I am concerned that I might miss something important due to the my absence since I know it is critical for new employees to be familiar with the workplace through the training session. (批注:It is unnecessary to say all this. A Band 8 requires use of substitution to be more succinct.) this training day is compulsory.


Please(批注:In saying ‘Please leave…’ you are effectively giving your new boss an order or instruction. You can’t do that. All you can do is make a polite request ‘Would it be possible to leave…’.) Would it be possible to leave me a copy of the document used in the training at reception, and I will go through it the next morning. If I have any problem associated with this training, I will ask senior employees for help.


Thank you for accommodating this unexpected circumstance. I apologise for any inconvenience that may occur for you I may have caused.


Yours faithfully,

James



WORD COUNT 167 words; only 250 required


TASK ACHIEVEMENT

Covers the requirements of the task

Presents a clear purpose with the tone consistent and appropriate

Clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended


COHERENCE & COHESION

Logically organizes ideas; clear progression throughout

Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately but with some redundancy


LEXICAL RESOURCE

Use of a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

Use of less common vocabulary with some awareness of style and collocation

Rare errors in word choice, and/or word formation


GRAMMAR

Uses a variety of complex structures

The majority of sentences are error free



看完这篇范文,是不是大致都了解了到底G类的书信应该写成什么样呢?看着旁边的批注,大家一定都要避免这些问题哦!~

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