2015.11.21 A类大作文范文

Some say parents should be punished if their children break the law. Do you agree or disagree?

【家庭类话题又来咯~此次的题目要求大家讨论家长们应不应该因为自己的孩子违法而受到惩罚。问题虽然看似常规，却也要小心审题和构思。如果一不小心全篇都在讲家长不尽责而导致家庭教育失败，那么就偏题了~现在就让我们看看，这种话题到底该怎么写吧^^准备好摘抄本，记下好观点和词句吧<(￣︶￣)>】

Often when discussing juvenile delinquency, many are left questioning how the parents failed, raising the idea that parents should be punished for criminal acts committed by their children. Personally, I completely disagree with this view, as parenting is not always to blame and the kids still need to learn a lesson.

【这一段Introduction非常简单地复述了一下题目内容，并进行了相应的扩充，同时又给出了自己的观点和理由。尤其是最后一句，既是开头又可以作为对全文的summary。大家可以发现，好的introduction并不需要非常冗长的句子，只要把背景和观点讲清楚就好了~同时，倒装句和被动语态的使用也可以提升句子结构多样性，让文章变得有趣起来o(￣▽￣)】

Considering the fairness of punishing parents, some juvenile delinquency occurs despite good parenting. People are affected by a number of factors, including friends, siblings, and teachers. Parents may have the best intentions and may be doing their best to raise their children to be good people, but that does not stop kids from rebelling. “Schoolies”, a yearly holiday for graduating Australian students, is an example of how kids get in to a great deal of trouble, mainly due to other influences, irrespective of the quality of parenting.

【这一段讲了不能惩罚父母的第一个理由：家长可能想raise the kids to be good people，但是，孩子的成长过程中会受到其他影响：比如说，朋友，兄弟姐妹和老师，因此而学“坏”。“schoolies”是一个非常符合澳洲国情的例子，大家可以学习一下~despite和irrespective of都是比较好的“小词”，和文中的“but that does not stop kids from rebelling”呼应。大家可以放在摘抄本中】

Regardless of if punishing parents is fair, children still need to be taught that there are consequences for their actions. If a young person has committed a crime, they need to be reprimanded so that they will not continue the behavior. Without punishment acting as a deterrent, kids may not care if their parents are punished, especially given the argument above that kids will rebel. To illustrate the power of punishment for children, the concept of Santa Clause can be considered, whereby the threat of withholding gifts acts as a deterrent to misbehavior, which I have witnessed first-hand in my niece and nephew. This concept of Santa Clause works much in the same way as harsh punishments for criminal behavior.

【这段，作者开始叙述第二个观点，惩罚父母并不能让孩子知道他们行为的后果。Regardless of这一个让步结构，表面上似乎承认了惩罚父母是合理的这一事实，但却引出了“这并不能让孩子知道他们行为后果”的观点。Without punishment acting as a deterrent这句话假设了如果孩子不被惩罚的后果，虚拟语气的使用让人眼前一亮。圣诞老人的例子，非常地道，尤其作者亲眼目睹侄子侄女被教育的亲身经历增加了真实性和合理性】

In conclusion, the idea of punishing parents for their offspring’s deeds is completely off base, as children may commit crimes despite good parenting and criminals still need to be punished for their deeds.

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读完这篇范文，是不是觉得耳目一新，家庭类的文章竟然可以通过这个角度来写~而且全篇并没有什么“非常高级”的词哟~就像之前小雅哥一直强调的，雅思考试并不要求每个人都变成莎士比亚，如果你的论述回答了问题，解释的逻辑够严谨，例子有说服力，那么，高分自然就在向你招手啦~(～￣▽￣)～

那么问题就来了：像这样的好文章哪里找？

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