通用框架为

开头段：点题

主段一：积极的原因1

主段二：积极的原因2

主段三：消极的原因+对此的反驳

结尾段：再次表明立场

In this day and age, some adults like parents and school teachers are more likely to provide children with far more freedom than in the past. Nevertheless, in most cases giving children what they need is not the decision with wisdom.

Primarily, with being given less surveillance from teachers in school than ever before, children would throw their textbooks away and find out many meaningless ways to get relaxation. Under that circumstance, how many students would finish their homework could be imagined readily. This is to say, academic study of schoolchildren cannot be guaranteed at all. Worse still, pervasiveness of school-bully which might be caused by overmuch freedom to all schoolchildren makes parents doubt whether they should send their kids to school or not.

Additionally, more freedom given by parents implies less parenting children may gain from them. So sophisticated our world has become, that sometimes chances are that adults might even go astray by being misled by some bad persons or information. There must be a slim chance for children to grow up to be upright persons. Simultaneously, to a great extent those children might be targets of gangs that need new crew, drag dealer who want new clients and kidnappers who see them as leverage. 

In a nutshell, there seems to be excessively many potential risks once children are offered more freedom than before both in school and at home. Meanwhile, sufficient guidance and supervision do not mean their will and choices are not respected by adults at all. For being responsible, both parents and educators are supposed to make every effort to find out how to balance the freedom and control for children.

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