免费讲座 墨尔本大学免费雅思讲座
时间：8月28日 周四 6:15pm~8:15pm
地址：University of Melbourne, Babel 119
「讲座内容」Jeffrey (IELTS Expert 墨尔本无忧雅思写作主讲）- 最新官方答题纸大揭秘；- 写作如何准确审题；- 写作7分，6.5分区别到底在哪儿； - 口语高分如何准备；等等「Booking」
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雅思写作Introduction攻略
Example 1牛逼指数：★☆☆☆☆
「Topic」It is said that nowadays one cannot acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
「Answer」I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English，music tools，and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
「Comments」偏离主题，不知所云。
Example 2牛逼指数：★★☆☆☆
「Topic」Modern medicine helps to live a longer life. Do you agree?
「Answer」The modern medicine is very important for living a long life. It is depend on new technology. People take very easy and quickly. Also modern medicine is very quick absorbing to human body. It is helps to back to normal for people health condition. Therefore I agree that the modern medicine is helps to live longer.
「Comments」开头段啰嗦。语法错误，句子结构差。
Example 3牛逼指数 ★★☆☆☆
「Topic」positive negative aspects of modern technologies.
「Answer」Modern technology has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. It has brought us a lot of benefits but created some serious problems as well.
「Comments」典型的模板式开头。考官看的都要吐了。
Example 4牛逼指数：★★★☆☆
「Topic」private and public schools
「Answer」When it comes to schools, some people think that private school is better than public ones. Others argue that the opposite is true. There is probably some truth to both arguments, but I believe…
「Comments」又一个典型的模版型开头，虽然没有用“with the development of…” 这种看吐了的句型，但是someone think…Others argue…也是一个用的太多太多的模板句型。
Example 5牛逼指数：★★★★☆
「Topic」Nowadays the age at which children start to attend school is becoming younger and younger. Some children go to school at the age of four. Some people think it is good for children to attend school earlier, while others disagree.
「Answer」Nowadays, there is a growing tendency for children to attend school earlier. Some even go to school at the age of four. Yet, in my opinion, it's not a matter of the-earlier-the-better when we discuss the age when children should go to school. On the contrary, I think it is unhealthy for children to start school too soon.
「Comments」一句话解释题目背景，两句话表达了自己观点，引出下文。简洁明了，没有用什么高深的词汇，但依然是一篇高分introduction！
Example 6牛逼指数：★★★★★
「Topic」A burglar was shot dead by the owner of the house being broken into. Do you think the owner's action was justified? You should write at least 250 words. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
「Answer」Ever since this incident was reported in the newspapers there has been much controversy about it. After weighing all the pros and cons, I find that I agree that the owner's action was justified. I support my point of view with three arguments: Self-defense, the sanctity of property and the need to deter criminals.
「Comments」介绍题目，表达观点，这篇introduction的亮点在于最后一句对于整篇文章观点的总结。这需要同学们有较高的文字水平和总结能力，不能偏题，抓keywords要抓的准。如果对于用几个字词总结全文观点没有信心的话，建议还是不要尝试这类高分introduction。
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