【黑色】: 雅思写作素材 Why city life may be bad for you,澳洲新梦想雅思微信公众号文章

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Why city life may be bad for you.

此文从public health 角度出发，以RIBA学术研究结果为证，讨论了我们没有察觉到的city life负面影响。

雅思相关大作文题目：

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Dothe advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Why are young people leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantage？

(2013.12.14 IELTS A类大作文真题)

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“ When it comes to¹ getting people to be more active, much of the attention is focused on² the improving sports facilities (amenities)¹,encouraging people to³join the gym²or lambasting schools³ for⁴not doing enough PE.

But could another crucial factor⁵ be the way neighbourhoods are designed? The Royal Institute of British Architects (RIBA) thinks so.

The organisation has carried (carry) out an analysis of⁶the nine major cities in England - Birmingham, Bristol, Leeds, Liverpool, London,Manchester, Newcastle, Nottingham and Sheffield - to explore this. Its researchers looked at *housing density*⁴and the availability of greenspaces⁵.

‘Healthiercities⁶'

The least active areas⁷ - *deprived parts* of (major cities)⁸Birmingham, Newcastle and London - had twice the housing density and 20% less green space than the most active places⁹.This is important.

Nearly 60% of people living in these cities do not do the recommended levels of activity¹⁰. But, crucially⁷, three quarters said they would be happy to walk more and get outside in the fresh air if their local environment was more suitable, according to⁸ a poll cited by (peaking bodies)⁹ RIBA.

People cited safer streets¹¹and more attractive green spaces¹² as¹⁰ two key factors. RIBA has published the findings as it wants councils to take note. Under the shake-up of the NHS last year, local government was given responsibility for¹¹ (可替换为：*the onus is on the local government to ensure*) public health.

So RIBA president Stephen Hodder said he wantedcouncils to ensure¹²public health becomes an important part of the planning process. "It's vital that¹³planners and developers take the lead and ensure healthier cities," he added.

To be fair¹⁴, this is already happening in many places. Health impact assessments¹⁵have become a crucial part of¹⁶the process.

But as always - for councils which have seen (see) their funding cut dramatically in recent years¹⁷ (arts funding)- it comes down to¹⁸ money. One of the examples of good practicecited by RIBA in its report was the re-development of the Brownfield Estate, an inner-London housing estate¹⁹. It (undergo) under-went a major £7m buildingprogramme²⁰ with money invested from a variety of public and private sources¹⁹.

The project saw (see)²⁰ the walk-ways between flats²¹become "green grids" lined with grass and trees, while play areas²²were created across the site.

Another scheme highlighted was the creation of a natural play area with climbing frames, a water foundation and wetland on adisused field²³ (很好的例子) in the former mining town of Huthwaite in north Nottinghamshire. ”