【文书】被斯坦福大学录取的大牛,她的大学申请短文要写成啥样呢?准美高党们要学起来啦!

2016年04月25日 美国高中生


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转眼又到了美高党们开始举办毕业舞会的季节了,经过了四年美高生活的历练,一年的操心劳累,终于尘埃落定,大学申请工作圆满结束!当然,这个时节,美国高中的小伙伴们也是几家欢喜几家忧的,忧的人原因都一样,无非就是GPA低,被申请的美国好大学拒绝。欢喜的人各有欢喜的原因,比如说这位美高党,Brittany Stinson ,她先后被美国5所常春藤大学录取,这5所常春藤大学里包括耶鲁大学,哥伦比亚大学,宾夕法尼亚大学,达特茅斯学院和康奈尔大学。这还不是最出彩的,最出彩的是,世界名校斯坦福大学也向Brittany Stinson抛来了橄榄枝!要知道美国的斯坦福大学,学生录取率只有4.69%啊,这个比例可是在美国常春藤院校里录取比例最低的呢!

用“超级学霸”来形容入主斯坦福大学的Brittany Stinson来说真的不为过!不过人家Brittany Stinson可是说了:我觉得很震惊,因为对于大学申请我真的没有做好准备!可是Brittany Stinson被录取的所有学校学生录取比例都是在4.69%至13.96%之间。这些学校可个顶个的都是超难进的名校啊!天啦撸,没有做好准备,还能申请进入美国的斯坦福大学?我等学渣情何以堪?


美国的常春藤院校可是出了名的难进,能被录取的学生无非是学习好,绩点高,课外活动能力出众!除此之外,让人好奇的是,美高党们在其他方面究竟需要达到什么样的水准才能被像斯坦福这样的世界名校看中呢?或许Brittany Stinson的大学申请文书能给咱们准美高党们一些启示!


准美高党们可要看好了,想要进入世界名校,美高四年,除了成绩好,课外活动能力强,你的大学申请文书也必须达到这样的水准哦~


Brittany Stinson的大学申请文书范本:

Managing to break free from my mother’s grasp, I charged. With arms flailing and chubby legs fluttering beneath me, I was the ferocious two­ year old rampaging through Costco on a Saturday morning. My mother’s eyes widened in horror as I jettisoned my churro; the cinnamon­sugar rocket gracefully sliced its way through the air while I continued my spree. I sprinted through the aisles, looking up in awe at the massive bulk products that towered over me. Overcome with wonder, I wanted to touch and taste, to stick my head into industrial­sized freezers, to explore every crevice. I was a conquistador, but rather than searching the land for El Dorado, I scoured aisles for free samples. Before inevitably being whisked away into a shopping cart, I scaled a mountain of plush toys and surveyed the expanse that lay before me: the kingdom of Costco.

Notorious for its oversized portions and dollar­fifty hot dog combo, Costco is the apex of consumerism. From the days spent being toted around in a shopping cart to when I was finally tall enough to reach lofty sample trays, Costco has endured a steady presence throughout my life. As a veteran Costco shopper, I navigate the aisles of foodstuffs, thrusting the majority of my weight upon a generously filled shopping cart whose enormity juxtaposes my small frame. Over time, I’ve developed a habit of observing fellow patrons tote their carts piled with frozen burritos, cheese puffs, tubs of ice cream, and weight­loss supplements. Perusing the aisles gave me time to ponder. Who needs three pounds of sour cream? Was cultured yogurt any more well­mannered than its uncultured counterpart? Costco gave birth to my unfettered curiosity.

While enjoying an obligatory hot dog, I did not find myself thinking about the ‘all beef’ goodness that Costco boasted. I instead considered finitudes and infinitudes, unimagined uses for tubs of sour cream, the projectile motion of said tub when launched from an eighty foot shelf or maybe when pushed from a speedy cart by a scrawny seventeen year old. I contemplated the philosophical: If there exists a thirty­three ounce jar of Nutella, do we really have free will? I experienced a harsh physics lesson while observing a shopper who had no evident familiarity of inertia's workings. With a cart filled to overflowing, she made her way towards the sloped exit, continuing to push and push while steadily losing control until the cart escaped her and went crashing into a concrete column, 52” plasma screen TV and all. Purchasing the yuletide hickory smoked ham inevitably led to a conversation between my father and me about Andrew Jackson’s controversiality. There was no questioning Old Hickory’s dedication; he was steadfast in his beliefs and pursuits – qualities I am compelled to admire, yet his morals were crooked. We both found the ham to be more likeable–and tender.

I adopted my exploratory skills, fine tuned by Costco, towards my intellectual endeavors. Just as I sampled buffalo­chicken dip or chocolate truffles, I probed the realms of history, dance and biology, all in pursuit of the ideal cart–one overflowing with theoretical situations and notions both silly and serious. I sampled calculus, cross­country running, scientific research, all of which are now household favorites. With cart in hand, I do what scares me; I absorb the warehouse that is the world. Whether it be through attempting aerial yoga, learning how to chart blackbody radiation using astronomical software, or dancing in front of hundreds of people, I am compelled to try any activity that interests me in the slightest.

My intense desire to know, to explore beyond the bounds of rational thought; this is what defines me. Costco fuels my insatiability and cultivates curiosity within me at a cellular level. Encoded to immerse myself in the unknown, I find it difficult to complacently accept the “what”; I want to hunt for the “whys” and dissect the “hows”. In essence, I subsist on discovery.


对准美高党们来说,如果你想进入美国的顶尖大学学习,那么你要去美高学习的四年还要面临着很大的挑战!就只是这么一篇洋洋洒洒的大学申请文书,小伙伴们也能看出自己跟学霸们的差距了吧?


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