12月15日亚太写作分析

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12.15亚太写作分析

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2018年12月15日的考试已经落下帷幕。雅思姐在这里和大家分析一下这场考试的写作题目。


  大作文题目

Some school leavers go travelling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

文章结构:利弊分析

关键词:school leavers, travel or work, directly to university

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    审题    

这次的考试题目属于工作类话题,考察的是学生间隔年的利与弊。本次考试题目雅思姐发现,它不光是2015年2月28日的题目。还有剑5的Test2,范文在165页哦~这种换汤不换药的情况屡见不鲜,所以认真做过真题的同学是不是觉得这波简直赚到手啦~ 这次题目的讨论方式也是再常见不过的分析利弊了,这对于大部分烤鸭来说岂不是信手拈来!

题目大意为:

毕业生在升入大学之前会工作旅行一段时间,对于学生是否利大于弊?school leavers在这里指的就是毕业生,the gap year 称之为‘间隔年’,也叫‘断档年’,关于gap year的利弊也是老生常谈了。年轻人,在应该头破血流的年纪,就应该不念过去,不畏将来,志在千里,足行天下!那雅思姐接下来就帮大家分析分析相关的观点吧。

剑5Test2 考官范文

It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. This trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.


The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or traveling to other places have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.

However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.

My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.
                                                                                               (291 words)



2、论点

   分析论点   

在讨论gap year的利与弊之前,我们要先考虑一下这种情况的背景,高中生毕业之后选择去旅行或者工作,这其实是国外很多国家的现状以及主流思想。家里有钱的学生有足够的资金支持去旅行,家里较穷的学生也可以通过一段时间的工作变得经济独立。总的来说,间隔年是利大于弊的,所以利大于弊的立场更容易着手。

Advantage

  • 出去旅行可以开阔视野,储备更多个人资源,结交朋友,锻炼独立性,对于以后继续学习和发展都是有益的

  • 工作一段时间不仅能够帮助年轻人积累社会经验,使他们对社会有更加深刻的了解,为以后的工作打下坚实基础

  • 不论是工作还是旅行,都能够培养人们的社会意识,丰富人生阅历,拥有成熟的心态去面对人生中的各种挑战。

Disadvantage

  • 经过一段时间的离开,学生可能很难再重返校园,会发现很难再适应学校的学术氛围,因此便有悖于gap year的初衷

  • 高中时期的学生是学习能力最强,也是最宝贵的阶段,如果耽搁一定时间的话,学业进度很容易被耽搁。尤其是在这个对学历有固定要求的社会,不利于学生未来的发展。


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   行文逻辑    

因为讨论利与弊的问法可以有不同的框架,那下面的框架只是其中一种,大家可以参考一下:

开头段

背景介绍+争议观点+本人观点

主一段

间隔年的利

主二段

间隔年的弊

结尾段

再次重申观点+总结理由

4. 相关词汇和句型

词汇和句型

a)be led astray    被引入迷途

b) ...is a two-edged sword...    是一把双刃剑

c) this is one of the best ways to mature their thoughts and chasten their characters. 这是成熟他们的思想,磨炼他们性格的最佳方式之一。

d) to experience the gap year   体验间隔年

e) do some sightseeing=to be well-traveled     自己旅行

f) readapt to an academic environment   重新适应学术环境

g) broader view= broader horizons    开阔视野


  小作文题目

本次小作文是动态线图,描述了从2001-2005年4种不同类型面包的价格变化。剑5的Test1小作文就和这次的题目类型相似,大家可以参考一下考官作文的用词和结构。


题目:(剑5Test1)The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

如下文章供大家参考:

The graphs indicate the changing proportion which delayed and cancelled trains represented during the seven weeks from the first one of October.


When it comes to the rate of delayed trains, it witnessed a stable increase from 20% to 30% in the first week of October, followed by a considerably downward movement to 10% in the next two weeks. After restoring itself, outstripping the most serious level to the peak of 50% in the second week of November, it was blessed with a partial recovery to 30% in the end.


Turning to the ratio of cancelled trains, the story also experiences a sharp fluctuation. To be specific, it suffered from a significant rise from 3% to 7% one week later, when it started to return to its original level in the following week. From this point on, it went ups and downs dramatically during the remaining time, hitting the bottoms of 2% twice in the fourth week of October and second one of November.


Seen from the charts, the rate of both delayed and cancelled trains changed largely and on the whole the problems became more serious during the given time.


那12月15日的作文雅思姐就分析到这里啦!咱们下期再会啦~


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